TABLE 2.

Examples of feedback provided in each condition

	Nonnarrative	Narrative
General trouble controlling avatar	It looks like you ran out of time in the game this time around, but that’s okay…because you’re still learning how to control the ball of light. Next time, maybe you can try to experiment with it and see how it responds to your movements.	Alright, so you ran out of time to save the bunnies this time around, but you can try again. Learning magic in the land of Magmire takes a lot of time, but you’ve nearly mastered it. Controlling the Lightning Sphere is really hard, but you can definitely do it. Maybe if you experiment with how it responds to your movements you be able to control it better.
Going off path	I think you’d come across a lot more rabbits if you follow the path more closely. There’s an entire section with more bunnies in it. So slowing down may not be what you want to do, but if you find those bunnies you’ve been missing, you’ll get a lot more points. It’s okay to stop for a moment to get an idea of where the path is.	I think you could save a lot more of the bunnies if you follow the path more closely. You know, the rabbits have been telling scary stories about Furlepus for years. It’s probably very tempting to take shortcuts through the forest to avoid him and get to the end of the trail faster. But you might miss some of the traps if you do that, and those bunnies wouldn’t be very happy, so try to stick to the path.
Hitting obstacles	One thing to remember is to avoid the red lights. They’re there for a reason: to see how good you are at seeing them and staying away from them…anyway, I think you’ll be able to do it lot better next time.	One thing to remember is to avoid the red fireflies. Furlepus put them there for a reason: to sap magic from your Lightning Sphere. He’s always thinking up new ways to steal magic from the rabbits of Magmire, and this certainly is a good one. Anyway, I think you’ll be a lot better at staying away from his red firefly traps next time.